A heavy heart, omnis? You're not telling her her grandmother just died. But other than that, it looks fine.
We use the latest in scientific technology and state-of-the-art weaponry and you, if I understand correctly, poke them with a sharp stick.
Dr. Walsh ,'Potential'
Spike's Bitches 44: It's about the rules having changed.
[NAFDA] Spike-centric discussion. Lusty, lewd (only occasionally crude), risqué (and frisqué), bawdy (Oh, lawdy!), flirty ('cuz we're purty), raunchy talk inside. Caveat lector.
Sean K - Jul 09, 2009 1:01:44 pm PDT #15979 of 30000
You can't leave me to my own devices; my devices are Nap and Eat. -Zenkitty
amych - Jul 09, 2009 1:03:04 pm PDT #15980 of 30000
Now let us crush something soft and watch it fountain blood. That is a girlish thing to want to do, yes?
If it can be done, some human has not only done it, but gotten off on it.
Don't forget "and written fic about it on the internets".
omnis_audis - Jul 09, 2009 1:04:39 pm PDT #15981 of 30000
omnis, pursue. That's an order from a shy woman who can use M-16. - Shir
A heavy heart, omnis? You're not telling her her grandmother just died. But other than that, it looks fine.Well, she's trying to find a job in the arts in this economy. If she doesn't find one soon, she gets sent back to So. Korea. So ya, a little heavy on the heart. But that's just me. I'm a pushover.
amych - Jul 09, 2009 1:07:25 pm PDT #15982 of 30000
Now let us crush something soft and watch it fountain blood. That is a girlish thing to want to do, yes?
Agree with Sean on the heavy heart -- it's florid where you want sympathetic but businesslike. Change it to "Unfortunately". And in the next sentence, you hope your paths cross because you'd like to work with her on some future project (or the like). Just "I'd like to work with you" leaves the person wondering "well, why the hell didn't you hire me", whereas the second version leaves the door to "it wasn't the right time/position/circumstances".
Polter-Cow - Jul 09, 2009 1:07:28 pm PDT #15983 of 30000
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!
A heavy heart, omnis? You're not telling her her grandmother just died. But other than that, it looks fine.
Yeah, that stood out to me too.
Well, she's trying to find a job in the arts in this economy. If she doesn't find one soon, she gets sent back to So. Korea.
Eep.
-t - Jul 09, 2009 1:09:41 pm PDT #15984 of 30000
I am a woman of various inclinations and only some of the time are they to burn everything down in frustration
I don't know, omnis, that heavy heart line sounds a little like you would have hired her but were forced to go with another applicant against your own judgement. Which, if that's what you actually mean, is of course fine, but that's not the impression I was getting from your other posts.
OTOH, I'm trying to think of a way to say "I wish we could have hired you, too" that doesn't sound like that and not doing very well, so maybe that's okay.
meara - Jul 09, 2009 1:10:07 pm PDT #15985 of 30000
Yeah, the heavy heart kinda makes it sound like "*I* wanted to hire you but the OTHER meanie weanies made me hire someone else!!!"
t edit: xpost with -t!
billytea - Jul 09, 2009 1:15:41 pm PDT #15986 of 30000
You were a wrong baby who grew up wrong. The wrong kind of wrong. It's better you hear it from a friend.
Ryan is currently rocking out to the dangly toys over his playmat. Occasional squeals of delight. You can see him just getting the inklings that with a bit of practice, he might be able to grab them. It doesn't get any better than this.
omnis_audis - Jul 09, 2009 1:16:45 pm PDT #15987 of 30000
omnis, pursue. That's an order from a shy woman who can use M-16. - Shir
*I* wanted to hire you but the OTHER meanie weanies made me hire someone else!!!"Well, there was some of that at one point, but then the #2 option got a *LOT* stronger as I called her references. And then it worked out that the team I hired have all worked together before, and enjoy being a team together, so that was super duper bonus. But ya, she was my top applicant for awhile.
Sean K - Jul 09, 2009 1:16:53 pm PDT #15988 of 30000
You can't leave me to my own devices; my devices are Nap and Eat. -Zenkitty
That's understanable, omnis. I'm thankful every single day that I make a livable wage doing this (most of the time).
But it doesn't read right. It's a little over the top.