You know, I have this rash.....
You know, I just... I woke up, and I looked in the mirror, and I thought, hey, what's with all the sin? I need to change. I'm... I'm dirty. I'm, I'm bad with the... sex and the envy and that, that loud music us kids listen to nowadays.
Buffy ,'Lessons'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Ginger - Sep 02, 2008 11:35:58 am PDT #847 of 6734
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
Barb - Sep 02, 2008 11:39:05 am PDT #848 of 6734
“Not dead yet!”
You know, I have this rash.....
Pbbbbbbbblllllllltttttttt
(Or, if My Big Fat Greek Wedding advice is to be believed, a spritz of Windex will clear that right up.)
Burrell - Sep 02, 2008 11:41:40 am PDT #849 of 6734
Why did Darth Vader cross the road? To get to the Dark Side!
Allyson, you can send it to me too. I may be busy but I'm not too busy for you.
lisah - Sep 02, 2008 11:46:37 am PDT #850 of 6734
Punishingly Intricate
Burrell that reminds me that I totally owe you feedback! My brain has been vacationing these last couple weeks.
Allyson - Sep 02, 2008 12:16:36 pm PDT #851 of 6734
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
laga, have you read any of it or should i send you chapters 1-4?
Laga - Sep 02, 2008 12:50:25 pm PDT #852 of 6734
You should know I'm a big deal in the Resistance.
I haven't read any of it but what you posted on line. I'd love to read it from the beginning!
Allyson - Sep 03, 2008 6:01:21 am PDT #853 of 6734
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
insent to all with thanks.
I made Samwriter open your edits, Bev, I'm too scared.
Beverly - Sep 03, 2008 6:27:26 am PDT #854 of 6734
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Oh honey, you know I'm gentle. Plus, there's never much wrong.*
I am curious what he had to say, comparing his and yours, though. I was not ruthless with his chapter, but I was honest, and I winced about it a little bit after I sent it. He wrote me the sweetest thank you note.
*Where "wrong"="might need to be tweaked."
Barb - Sep 03, 2008 7:18:29 am PDT #855 of 6734
“Not dead yet!”
I was not ruthless with his chapter, but I was honest, and I winced about it a little bit after I sent it.
Bev is me here. I was the same way, wincing and all. which Allyson well knows.
Allyson - Sep 03, 2008 7:57:58 am PDT #856 of 6734
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
It helped him push through it, and he sent me a rocking draft, with fleshed out fight scene, bolder description...he rose to it. Which means I'm not facing enormous rewrites.
No wincing. He's crash-coursing it. I'm proud of him. It's been lovely to watch someone bloom.
The book is something that I've been wanting to quit. I can't keep the narrative arc up, I'm not imaginative enough to make it compelling fiction. It's all very amateurish, and I feel ashamed of what I've written.
Sobbed good and hard in the shower.